Q. I've
heard that short sentences communicate better than long ones. How long should
an average sentence be?
A. Strive
for sentences that are no longer than 17 words - 19-21 words if you're writing
for a college-educated audience.
Q. Does
that mean that every sentence should be about 17 words long?
A. No.
Sentences that are essentially the same length destroy the rhythm of writing.
You're seeking an average. That means you may have some sentences that are 25
or 30 word long and others that contain no more than four or five words. But
I'd avoid sentences longer than 30 words.
Q. Isn't it
possible to write long sentences that communicate well?
A. Yes. If the sentences flow well. For the most part, though, long
sentences make it harder for the reader to grasp the message, because they
contain too many ideas. The shorter the sentence, as a rule,
the fewer the ideas. Tip: Consider the period your best friend, and use
it often.
Q. Several
writing formulas also counsel against long words. Would you explain why?
A. As a
rule, the more prefixes and suffixes added to a word, the more abstract the
word becomes. And abstract words don't communicate quickly. Take the word
"serve," for example. You can "serve" people or
"serve" in tennis, and so on. Now add the suffix "ice," and
you've got "service," a slightly more complex word, but one that's
still easy enough to understand. But if you add "able" to
"service" and create "serviceable," the word becomes even
more abstract. Now, let's go one step further and add the prefix "non" and you've got "nonserviceable,"
a much more complex word.
Q. Should
we avoid long words altogether?
A. Of
course not. But we should challenge every one we use to make sure the reader
will easily grasp our meaning. And we should avoid using several long words in
a row whenever possible.
Q. Aren't
there several readability formulas based on the length of sentences and words?
A. Yes. Two
famous ones are the Gunning-Mueller Fox Index and the Rudolf Flesch Reading Ease Formula. The Fog Index appears to be
more widely used today.
Q. Would
you explain how it works?
A. Take a
group of words and count them until you come to the 100th word. If it's in the
middle of a sentence, go to the end of the sentence and count the number of
words above 100.
Then, count
the number of sentences in those 100 or so words and divide that number into
the number of words to get an average number of words per sentence.
Next, count
the number of words of three or more syllables in the first 100 words. Don't
count proper nouns, combinations of short words such as "bookkeeper"
or "manpower," or the number of verbs made into three syllables by
adding "-ed" or "-es."
Next, add
the average number of words per sentence to the number of words with three or
more syllables in the 100-word sample.
Finally,
multiply the sum by .4.
Consider
this example: 12 words per sentence plus 17 words of three or more syllables
equals 29. Multiplying 29 by .4, you get 11.6, the grade level of the sample.
Keep in
mind that the average American reads on the 9th-grade level and that college
graduates tend to struggle with anything above the 16-grade level. Note: Many
people prefer to read one or two grade levels below their maximum attainable
level. We call that the "comfort level." Some writers aim for this
level.
Q. But
won't following a formula tend to shackle your writing?
A. Don't
follow the formula while writing. Go ahead and write freely. Use the formula to
check your writing when you edit it. If the fog is too high, edit heavily. The
more often you apply the formula when you edit, the more adept you'll become at
incorporating its principles into the normal writing skills.
Q. Can you
suggest an easier way to check your copy for readability?
A. Try
these:
1. Restrict
60-70 percent of your words to five letters or fewer. If you do, you'll be on a
par with Lincoln's Gettysburg Address and some of Shakespeare's
works. A variant: Try for an average of five letters per word. A study of major
newspapers disclosed that their stories averaged 5.07 letters per word.
2. Allow no
more than two ideas per sentence. As noted earlier, short sentences tend to do
this for you automatically. Another thing you can do: Make 60 to 70 percent of
your sentences simple ones - those containing just a subject and predicate
without additional clauses.
Example:
"The cat crossed the street" is a simple sentence containing just one
idea. "The large, gray cat crossed the wide
street" is still a simple sentence even though it contains several
adjectives. But "The cat crossed the street, because she wanted to get
home" has two ideas, because it contains a clause.
3. Try to
locate a software program called "Grammatik" and another one called
"Right Writer." I understand both are able to calculate a Fog Index
on a computer. I recently checked with several software retailers and could not
locate either one. One retailer said Word Perfect had incorporated one of these
programs into its software. If you are unable to locate one, you may be able to
find a user who owns one of the original programs.
Q. Are
there any formulas for speech writing?
A. Yes. Dr.
Irving Fang, a professional writer, devised this one called "The Easy
Listening Formula." Here's how it works:
Count each
syllable above one per word in every sentence. Strive for a score of 12 or less
per sentence. A one-syllable word, such as "how," would not be
counted. A three-syllable word, such as "interview," would count as
two because it contains two extra syllables.
Example:
Consider the sentence "He likes to eat in famous restaurants whenever he
goes on vacation." The first five words are not counted because they
contain no syllable above one per word. The word "famous" contains
one extra syllable, "restaurant" contains two extra,
"whenever" contains two extra, and "vacation" also contains
two extra." The words "he goes on" contain no extra syllables.
Therefore,
the "hearability" score of this sentence is
seven – a "hearable" sentence.
In case you
haven't realized it, this formula penalizes you for long sentences as well as
for long words, in this sense: The longer sentences offer an opportunity to
include more long words.